So descriptive, I know this place well.
Your last three lines encapsulate a intriguing twist and I enjoy the employment of shape in the flowing down of thoughts. Great write!
All of us hide in those dark places .... from time to time. Lovely writing.
I love it, especially the closing lines!
it is really cool how you dropped the home image right there in the river. perfect immersion, and subtle and compact. great write.
This is really cool!
This poem really moved me. Bittersweet... and the prison that's made of murky water. Darkly fabulous. Amy
Aqualung my friend, you've written a twisty little nightmare here. I like it.
Oh, this is just excellent. I want to stand up and clap!!
it's interesting to be immersed in the flow .......
eeek, at least you took the wetsuit off. :)
my skin is my wetsuit, except when the water's just too cold. i've hung my wetsuit here, too.
Oh, those murky waters...I love the depth of your voiceWell doneso chilling
Intriguing. Very intriguing.K
So descriptive, I know this place well.
ReplyDeleteYour last three lines encapsulate a intriguing twist and I enjoy the employment of shape in the flowing down of thoughts. Great write!
ReplyDeleteAll of us hide in those dark places .... from time to time. Lovely writing.
ReplyDeleteI love it, especially the closing lines!
ReplyDeleteit is really cool how you dropped the home image right there in the river. perfect immersion, and subtle and compact. great write.
ReplyDeleteThis is really cool!
ReplyDeleteThis poem really moved me. Bittersweet... and the prison that's made of murky water. Darkly fabulous. Amy
ReplyDeleteAqualung my friend, you've written a twisty little nightmare here. I like it.
ReplyDeleteOh, this is just excellent. I want to stand up and clap!!
ReplyDeleteit's interesting to be immersed in the flow .......
ReplyDeleteeeek, at least you took the wetsuit off. :)
ReplyDeletemy skin is my wetsuit, except when the water's just too cold. i've hung my wetsuit here, too.
ReplyDeleteOh, those murky waters...
ReplyDeleteI love the depth of your voice
Well done
so chilling
Intriguing. Very intriguing.
ReplyDeleteK