into the world, red and slick, re-
incarnated she will not wait--
She will squall without the spank--
Warrior cry, Pen poised--
to mar the blank slate--
New life, new woman--
New dress? Perhaps--
Yes, to be sure.
Trouble will come to call.
She will have her track shoes on
before the knocker can sound.
Bus, train, car or fleetest foot--
Speed boat, aero plane--
Leaving Trouble in the dust.
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I chose the third choice, Kenia's Wednesday challenge, for my inspiration.
I had written off Marianne Moore a long time ago (the HYPHENS!!!) and it was nice to revisit her work. She was a lot better the second time around. I could even see a similarity of style between us.
I took my title from her poem "Diligence Is to Magic as Progress Is to Flight."
I also chose to follow her style and see if I could make those confusticated hyphens work for me.
Her original poem : here
I think you succeeded.. There is a staccato with the hyphens that you captured. Sounds like a good reason to escape.
ReplyDeleteThis was brilliant :D
ReplyDeleteLoved it!
xoxo
Very nicely done! I like the brevity of expression and I like the use of dashes - they create pause and expectation.
ReplyDeleteIt's so challenging to write from a source you don't especially like, but you've done a fine job of managing the &%$# hyphens and crafting something worthwhile.
ReplyDeleteOh, how I love those first two stanzas! Awesome!
ReplyDelete--no rhyme? it works for me. precise &condensed. (i'm messing with you w/ Moorish type)--"yes. to be sure" was my favorite. I like it when the poet thinks on the page.
ReplyDeleteIf there could only be a second chance at life we would be better prepared.
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I think you made it work, and created a fascinating character in the process.
ReplyDeleteLove the dashes..sort of a breathless feeling to it. Love that second stanza!
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