Friday, May 22, 2015

The Head is a Pitcher, The Nose Its Spout

 I was weeping in my closet.
(Do you weep inside yours?)
I cracked the spine and wrote
(It was a dark and stormy face)
A list of the things I knew for certain
(choosing buoyancy over drowning)
 Skills were noted, faiths testified
(And I wrote I look good in black)
I closed the book with determined snap
(then I put away pairs of shoes)
 I filled three pages with things I knew
(I could've eaten my feelings instead)
 Emptied my heart, cleared my head
(cramped hand and a pain in the neck).

10 comments:

  1. Its a good thing to write down your feelings rather than keep them bottled up!

    I filled three pages with things I knew
    (I could've eaten my feelings instead)
    Emptied my heart, cleared my head

    Your poem spoke volumes to me!
    Beautifully executed :D
    xoxo

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  2. I'm a big fan of parenthetical use in poetry. You've served it well, here.

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  3. Choosing buoyoncy over drowning... Oh there's a reason for those lists.

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  4. Sometimes lists serve only to remind one of what is missing.. I love your approach to this prompt, your parenthetical asides and the wonderfully cynical conclusion.

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  5. Awesome. Some of the parentheticals cracked me up...the dark and stormy face! So glad you took part in my challenge!

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  6. I love the 'voice' in this...it's a little cynical and sassy. Sometimes writing out those feelings instead of eating them really does get us nowhere but a cramped hand and a pain in the neck, but we do it anyways and good for us :-)

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  7. I am getting the impression your poems always choose buoyancy.

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  8. Great, great! Love it. I kind of hate that phrase "eating my feelings" and you've expressed it perfectly here. Perfect!
    I need to clean out my closet today, come to think of it. I'll think of you and this :)

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